Wednesday, July 23, 2008

zoned student

life lessons slowly being relearned
i sit and hear the teacher speak for a turn
learn for the second
forget once i stop
looking at my arm in hope i burned the key to life there
directions on each lesson there
arrogent nature rams heads with the lessons i try to learn
released into the wild
my nature knows not how to react
never been here before
in this place
in this way
or maybe i have
and can no longer keep track

i lean to the others
everyone else in my pack
this new pack i wandered into
head looking down

afraid of attack
a whimper escapes
hoping it's enough of a hint
some laugh and chuckle
others maul it over for a quick second

just teach me this lesson
the one from my teachers
i didn't listen to them
but they explained too many broad details
i know i'm unhappy
please, fix it for me
but in the mean time,
please don't change me...

1 comment:

  1. "my nature knows not of how to react"
    the phtasing is strange. 'of' is unnecessary.

    "and just can no longer keep track"
    'just' seems unnecessary.

    "this new pack i wandered into"

    "head looking down, afraid of attack"

    and once again, the multiple metaphors...but it flows better this time. i really like this =]

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